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todays' modern world, there is no doubt that people are getting connected over social media but not aware about person who is living next to him. What are the problems and how can one overcome it?

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In today's modern
world
, there is no doubt that people are getting connected over social media but not aware of a person who is living
next
 to him. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the major of causes relating to
this
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these
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 issues, and try to provide some possible solutions to overcome
this
 disturbing problem. Discussing the reasons, the most common one is a busy lifestyle in
this
 global
world
. A good example to illustrate
this
 point would be globalization where people are working around the clock, and not getting
time
 from their busy schedule to get to know their neighbours. Another one is technology advancement which has created a virtual
world
.
For example
, games like GTA, PubG or Boom Beach are having a virtual
world
 where many people used to play in their free
time
, and stay connected with virtual friends rather than spending
time
 with the actual human being. Despite the above arguments, there are many possible resolutions to overcome
this
 problem.
First
, someone should take responsibility and start events for the neighbourhood where all spend a great
time
 and have a conversation with each other.
This
 kind of event could be arranged monthly or weekly.
Second
, they can
also
 create social media groups on Facebook or other social network services which can
also
 support to have a day to day interaction.
Furthermore
, if children know their neighbours
then
 they get interested in outdoor activities. To conclude, the issue of not knowing neighbours could be sensible and easily tackled if the above measures are taken into consideration by both the concerned authorities and the general public.
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