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Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. To what extent you agree or disagree

#home #necessity #government
Presently, living cost is so high.
This
 influence can even be seen in the house price as well. It is sometimes thought that the poverty-stricken people must be financially assisted by the government authority since
this
 is one of the basic requirements and I support
this
 view. A safe living atmosphere protects them from many dangers and
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 self-confidence have resulted when the nation assists the needy people to build their home will be analysed to prove. The primary reason why I think the authority ought to help poor citizens because they are vulnerable to many
abuse
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as they are on
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treets.
In other words
, by providing a safe shelter or place called home would save them from potential threats; robbery, physical or sexual abuse, and so on.
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, they may end up in
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nti-social group to earn money in a short way, eventually, their life may be tarnished irreversible.
For instance
, in a documentary called homeless, which explained how difficult to live in
such
 a situation, can be really painful. Another reason to construct affordable housings for the homeless is that it would boost their morale. Since they can earn respect and acceptance from society and they feel good about themself and can keep their belongings and valuables in a safe place.
Similarly
,they can stay in one place rather than moving, which, eventually assists them to find a secure job and pay their bills by self. Slowly and gradually, the country itself moves forward and can ensure a good standard of living to its people. In conclusion, by ensuring an affordable housing facility for the poor, they feel more secure and out of danger along with self-respect. It is highly recommended that every country in the world should make a policy, which offers homes for all.
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