In the past shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is positive trend?

Today people are living in a world of advertising where lots of products and services attract them. Their definition of essential and necessity is changing day by day. Shopping is kind of necessary as well as trending
experience
for them. In the past time shopping was a routine daily task but now it is completely changed. That shopping
experience
was completely missed few things
for instance
product’s actual feel, variety, credit facilities, discounts and offers, comparison etc.
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was not
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eal king as today because of limited available shops and less spending habits. People
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more on necessities. They could not think much about expensive products in the terms of buying products like a car, refrigerator, air conditioner considered as
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uxury.
On the other hand
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huge shopping malls are available today with
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variety of products. Which gives them
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experience
like a different world, music which is playing around makes them more
stress free
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, children’s have their play zones which makes them happier.
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is completely changed past luxurious products is now today’s essential. Companies providing great discounts, credit facility, offers etc. People do buy luxurious products with the help of credit cash provided by banks and different financial institutes. I
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with
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trend because it is a
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stress relief
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but It is often seen that people who having
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rend of shopping on weekends is not good in
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igger picture. They can spend
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ame time with their children, sports activities, health or family
get togethers
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get-togethers
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