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you arranged to visit a friend in canada but an importent event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit

#visit #friend #canada #importent #event #home #change #dates
Everybody knows that damage to the
environment
 can be harmful
for
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 us and our
next
generation
.
Although
 any issue about
e
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nvironment can affect our daily life, unfortunately nowadays people do not care about environmental problems. Whereas the
environment
 is not important for many people. Education is an important factor to make people aware
about
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 nature and it's important in our daily life as well as for our
next
generation
. In school
text book
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 environmental education should include, so our coming
generation
 is going to be aware
about
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 the
environment
. Most people do not think about prosperity for those who will live on the earth for upcoming  centuries.
For example
, people cut trees as much as they can for timber, paper and all our luxurious life. They do not care about the
environment
 and its damages.
Furthermore
, some of the environmental effects will not occur immediately by doing harmful actions by people.
Therefor
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 people do not recognise bad impact immediately. 
For example
, many of the resources will not be available for 
our
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next
generation
.
Such
 as
water
, nowadays there are many resources of
water
 available and plenty of
water
 is there now, so people are not saving
water
. They could not believe the small mistake could destroy the
environment
. Recently bushfires took place in Australia as well as in the U.S. California. A small fire burned huge jungle and
also
 many animals died in
this
 fire. To conclude, people do not care about
the
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environment
 issues seriously. The
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 behind
this
 is lack of education and people are ignoring the future 
generation
 need and requirements. They are thinking about the current situations only, not for long time possibilities and effects.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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