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The internet means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#internet #people #travel #countries
Trip to grasp of different live of distinct countries is no needed anymore because of
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nternet. I completely agree with it and will write the reasons for it.
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nternet, Foundation of world-web-wide(www) was the creation of a network to share progress about CERN experiments in Europe. Information sharing is the main purpose of the
internet
this
 is because nowadays individuals are using social media
such
 as; Twitter, Youtube, Facebook, Blogs to demonstrate their ways of
life
 and
also
 their private
life
 too. So anyone can find every detail about other countries via
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nternet. Especially Z generation on social media is open to every experience to share their way of living and
this
also
 creates massive information ocean about every culture, tradition to learn new things about them.
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 to that, a journey doesn't ensure to understand the other lifestyles. Because
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erson can only see others live in a short period, they need to stay more than travel time.
However
,
internet
 especially social media stores many data to see every
second
 of people in other countries.
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that
person
 can contact
this
person
 who can provide detailed information about their
life
,
therefore
 you have a deep knowledge of their way of
life
. According to some research people around the world is illustrating their way of living to catch interaction on Instagram or another social media mediums. In a conclusion, I believe via social media of
internet
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oyage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • virtually explore
  • multicultural experiences
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • cultural immersion
  • online resources
  • digital age
  • cultural differences
  • language barriers
  • physical distance
  • perspective
  • cultural appreciation
  • educational value
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