You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter, •Complain about the situation •Say why this is a problem •And propose ways to reduce the noise

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Joscelin Smith and I am a student residing in room 101 at Holmer Hall. I have always loved living in
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residence as the other students living there are friendly and I get
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organises study groups so it allows me to study with like-minded individuals. Recently, I began encountering high
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of noise coming from the new campus restaurant around the corner from my hall which is open until 2 am in the morning. Every night, there will be people shouting and a live band playing. There are a few reasons that
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, It ruins my concentration when I'm trying to finish my assignment.
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, I always pride myself
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having at least 8 hours of sleep every night. With the noise, it made it impossible.
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, as a person who likes peace and quiet, I get stressed if I’m in a noisy environment. I understand that university is a place for some people to have fun as it is the first time that many of them left home. I suggest only hosting live bands on the weekends. I
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suggest not serving alcohol after midnight to avoid disrupting the peace. I will be really grateful if
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be resolved soon. Kind regards, Joscelin
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure punctuation, especially commas, is consistent to enhance readability. For example, "Firstly, It ruins my concentration..." should be written as "Firstly, it ruins my concentration...".
Coherence and Cohesion
It might be helpful to split longer paragraphs to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. This can make your argument more compelling and easier to follow.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriately formal and polite, effectively conveying your concerns while maintaining respect towards the recipient.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a good introduction, body, and conclusion. The flow of ideas is logical which makes your points easy to understand.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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