some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?
Education plays a vital role in individual life.
And it
is often argued by some experts that educational institutes spend more time on theoretical rather than practical assessment. Correct word choice
It
This
essay agrees with this
notion that learning centres are not giving much importance to practical abilities and further
highlight
the factors.
Correct subject-verb agreement
highlights
Firstly
, it is quite evident that nowadays competition is more among the students
and educational academies are more focussed on theory subjects and not much-giving importance to hands-on experience. Due to
this
, students
are lacking with
cognitive skills and face failure at the international level exams. Wrong verb form
lack
For example
, AIIMS is a competitive exam and it has different modules to pass and the majority of students
failed in the practical section. Therefore
, students
did not get admission in
top universities.
Change preposition
to
Secondly
, the education system is not upgraded. In other words
, Institutes did not have feasible labs and experts for particular subjects, where pupils can
have a better understanding of the courses they are studying. Wrong verb form
could
For instance
, in India, there are many schools where one teacher is educating multiple subjects and due to
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
teachers
no real sessions Add a comma
teachers,
took
place and schools lack Wrong verb form
take
with
practical types of equipment Change preposition
apply
as a result
, only verbal education is given.
To conclude
,the lack of proper tools and professors can be viable reasons that children are depriving
of live tests. Wrong verb form
deprived
Also
, because of more competition schools are preparing children to pass overall
in spite of lab tests.Submitted by minhas.jaspreet333 on
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