some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?
Education plays a vital role in individual life.
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is often argued by some experts that educational institutes spend more time on theoretical rather than practical assessment. Correct word choice
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this
notion that learning centres are not giving much importance to practical abilities and Linking Words
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the factors.
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Firstly
, it is quite evident that nowadays competition is more among the Linking Words
students
and educational academies are more focussed on theory subjects and not much-giving importance to hands-on experience. Use synonyms
Due to
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this
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students
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are lacking with
cognitive skills and face failure at the international level exams. Wrong verb form
lack
For example
, AIIMS is a competitive exam and it has different modules to pass and the majority of Linking Words
students
failed in the practical section. Use synonyms
Therefore
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students
did not get admission Use synonyms
in
top universities.
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Secondly
, the education system is not upgraded. Linking Words
In other words
, Institutes did not have feasible labs and experts for particular subjects, where pupils Linking Words
can
have a better understanding of the courses they are studying. Wrong verb form
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For instance
, in India, there are many schools where one teacher is educating multiple subjects and Linking Words
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lack
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a lack
teachers
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teachers,
took
place and schools lack Wrong verb form
take
with
practical types of equipment Change preposition
apply
as a result
, only verbal education is given.
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To conclude
,the lack of proper tools and professors can be viable reasons that children are Linking Words
depriving
of live tests. Wrong verb form
deprived
Also
, because of more competition schools are preparing children to pass Linking Words
overall
in spite of lab tests.Linking Words
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