IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Education plays a vital role in individual life.
And it
Correct word choice
It
show examples
 is often argued by some experts that educational institutes spend more time on theoretical rather than practical assessment.
This
Linking Words
 essay agrees with
this
Linking Words
 notion that learning centres are not giving much importance to practical abilities and
further
Linking Words
highlight
Correct subject-verb agreement
highlights
show examples
 the factors.
Firstly
Linking Words
, it is quite evident that nowadays competition is more among the
students
Use synonyms
 and educational academies are more focussed on theory subjects and not much-giving importance to hands-on experience.
Due to
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
,
students
Use synonyms
are lacking with
Wrong verb form
lack
show examples
 cognitive skills and face failure at the international level exams.
For example
Linking Words
, AIIMS is a competitive exam and it has different modules to pass and the majority of
students
Use synonyms
 failed in the practical section.
Therefore
Linking Words
,
students
Use synonyms
 did not get admission
in
Change preposition
to
show examples
 top universities.
Secondly
Linking Words
, the education system is not upgraded.
In other words
Linking Words
, Institutes did not have feasible labs and experts for particular subjects, where pupils
can
Wrong verb form
could
show examples
 have a better understanding of the courses they are studying.
For instance
Linking Words
, in India, there are many schools where one teacher is educating multiple subjects and
due to
Linking Words
lack
Correct article usage
a lack
show examples
 of
teachers
Add a comma
teachers,
show examples
 no real sessions
took
Wrong verb form
take
show examples
 place and schools lack
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
practical types of equipment
as a result
Linking Words
, only verbal education is given.
To conclude
Linking Words
,the lack of proper tools and professors can be viable reasons that children are
depriving
Wrong verb form
deprived
show examples
 of live tests.
Also
Linking Words
, because of more competition schools are preparing children to pass
overall
Linking Words
 in spite of lab tests.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Your essay provides a basic response to the task. Make sure to address all aspects of the topic and present a clear argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has some logical progression and linking of ideas, but there are areas where the connection between ideas is not clear. Try to use more cohesive devices to link your ideas together.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: