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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Many young people do not watch the news channels on TV or read the newspaper in most of countries.
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 essay will discuss the main causes of
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 habit including not having an
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 in societal issues and hardly getting
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 from academic courses.
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 essay will suggest the solutions for these problems that parents should develop an
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 in their offspring about society and manage their
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accordingly
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. To start with,
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 development regarding problems in society and a lot of television channels focus on problems related to politics or economics
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 not favourable for young people. On the other side, old people follow it because they might have invested in the market and politics can be beneficial or harmful in any manner to society. Along with that, many of the children hardly get
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 from their studies to read the newspapers or watch these channels.
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, kids go for eight hours to school and later to private tuitions, which drained their most of
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 and hardly get
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 for reading newspapers and
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 they keen to watch sports or other news rather than political or societal problems, which is less focused by media.
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 to that, in order to tackle these issues, parents can play a vital role. They need to show their children how important these news are and why we should follow them. Some of the universities
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 can encourage students to follow that.
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, a university in Pakistan called Pafkiet always advises their new students on orientation to catch up the stock and business-related news and issues.
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 way they are managing their
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 as well and it has played a significant role and viewership of the certain TV channels jumped up since
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. To conclude, in many countries youth hardly read newspapers or follow it on TV as the main reasons are their
interest
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 in it and
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 management from studies, which can be tackled through developing that
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 and managing
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 from home or academic centres.
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