Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female study in every subject. Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays due to the feminist

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more women are becoming relevant in workplaces where before was only

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occupied

by men. The universities are the

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movement

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I will give some

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why I agree which the number of women and men should be the same in universities. The society

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to women more extra housing responsibilities than for men.

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ive the

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clean the houses, take care of the children, preparing lunch and dinner for the mother while for men do not

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because of his works required more of him and he is tired to do house duties. Incentive the same number of women in

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niversity will allow shows that everything must be

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women

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want study and women

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their careers.

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, women have theses dreams it is always let as a

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with men.

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men had priority to start their study in past years. Whereas, women had to stay at home doing all these house works because universities

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not allowed to women at early 19 sec. Because of it men had the access to study before

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oman and they are currently the majority in workplaces and they have

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high salary even if the women do the same job. For

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more women in workplaces and more salary competitive and fair for both gender and

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it is giving to women the same benefits which

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given for men. In conclusion, because of the men must

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learn

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the same opportunities which before

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only for men in

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niversity are some

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which I agree that the numbers must be equality for women and men at universities.

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