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Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extend to you agree?

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The brian intensive subjects
such
 as maths and philosophy are often considered to be non-essential to be learnt by each student.
Therefore
, some argue to set
such
 courses to be optional in the curriculum, while others disagree. I certainly believe that it is imperative to gain significant knowledge of these rather than avoid them as a whole. It is a general perception amongst the people that the subjects consisting of mathematics, science and philosophy aren't everyone's cup of tea. Few students struggle quite a lot to even pass
such
 exams, as they are out of their interest circle.
Additionally
, these courses might not have any noticeable impact on their future career as they progress in their field of interest.
Therefore
, the advocate of these pupils emphasis on the exclusion or at least makes them optional to be chosen.
Thus
, the average students would not suffer to put the effort in a way where it would not benefit them in the long run. In contrary, few argue on the involvement of these subject in our real
life
,
such
 as maths and science. It is intuitively obvious that maths is an integral part of our daily
life
, making a home budget, calculating taxing, managing monthly bills and paying off loans, all involve calculations,
although
 not complex ones.
Similarly
, science subjects could make our
life
 easier as we could know certain concepts relating to electric power, voltage or pressure, to read general descriptions on a common household gadget and appliances.
Hence
, the basics should have learnt at early education to survive well in the real
life
. To sum up,
although
 people argue whether certain subjects should be classified as mandatory in syllabus or not, due to the difficulty level of those. In my perspective, it is necessary to master the basic skills which are crucial and could assist in our daily
life
.
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