Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

technology
has impacted dramatically the human life. One of the aspects more affected has been the communication and interaction among relationships. Some people think that devices are changing
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peoples
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behaviour becoming more isolated. Others felt that
technology
opened more social opportunities to people who live in another country or loss the contact of old friends. I
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completely
agree with the
last
view. Nowadays are more tools to be social and
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with others.
First
of all, mobiles phones and other devices
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a paramount role in young people. Most of them spend
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average of 5 hours checking updates, emails, texts, or videos.
this
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behaviour
is
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scarcely
scarily
common in many families across the world. Indeed, the
last
survey of the Australian
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Psychology
Department illustrates that parents spend less time with their children compared to the past. One of the reasons for
that is
the influence of
technology
. Nowadays it less common that families shared meals because people are addictive with their phones.
Besides
, parents are texting with their peers after job ,children are playing online games, and
teenegers
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teenagers
are recording videos all the time.
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,
this
situation
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effects
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how families create bonds and strong relationships. Young people have to felt strong connections with their parents in order to prevent mental
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,
such
as depression or anxiety. So, it is crucial that families limited the used of
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devices to protect the
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family
families
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wellbeing.
On the other hand
,
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technology
has helped
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connecting
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many people who live
further
to their families or in another country. In the
last
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mobile phone and the internet allow people to be more closed. International students can
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maintain
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communication with their families and friends.
Moreover
, it is possible to shared photos, videos and letters at the time. Many people
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used social
medias
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media
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such
as Facebook , twitter or
instagram
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to find older friends or siblings. Allowing the possibility to maintain relationships. In conclusion, the
excesive
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excessive
use of
technology
inventions can be affected
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relationships and the people life. People can be loss friends and broke bonds due to
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obsessive
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such
as playing games or social
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media
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medias
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.
However
,
this
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each person and
also
of the family support.
technology
brings
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enormous
benefits of communication and is the most powerful tool to make new friends and be present in the modern world.
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