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. Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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According to a few people, from
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rimary section to up till college more importance is given to academics rather than
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 experience for subjects. I completely agree with the statement and
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valid
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To begin
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urrent education system based on students’ theory performance which creates undue stress on students, and sometimes they face
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sychological breakdown. In
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 pressurize their children to score more.
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 merely increased in students who fail to achieve desired marks or underperform in their exams.
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, even if students excel in theory, they fail when they have to practice what they learn in
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lassroom. Many graduates who scored
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ighest marks in their exam, but they fail when it comes to
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, electronic engineering topper student of collage may score highest in academics
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 but may fail in campus interview because of lack of practical experience.
This
 hinders progress in their carrier path.
Conversely
, some say if pupil having excellent performer throughout their school and institution, they could achieve in their professional life too. To conclude, in my opinion
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ducation system needs
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evolution, where they would give importance to practical’s too. The Government could improve
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raditional learning process and implements new system with more correlation
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between theory and practical.
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