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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulty getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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In today's world, there are a large number of people facing sleep deprivation.
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 as mental illness and stomach infections.
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, it is very important to resort to meditation and other means to ensure enough sleep.
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ack of sleep can have a direct impact on the immune system. In order for a body to recover completely it needs minimum six to seven hours of sleep and if that rest is not given it results in, a stomach infection, which leads to a reduction in the immunity.
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, research conducted by Professor Mathew at Oxford University stated that people who sleep less than five hours face the problem of indigestion and stomach infection.
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, limited sleep leads to a reduction in the processing time of the brain which results in serious mental health issues. To illustrate, one-fourth of the patients in the mental hospitals are the once suffering from insomnia. As
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 of sleep has a direct impact on the brain cells, which results in mental illness.
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 leads to falling in the energy level and productivity. One possible solution to control
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ack of sleep is restoration to meditation. As it has a calming effect on the nerves, which relaxes the muscles and releases all tensions. Another way to handle sleep deprivation is a reduction in the time spent on the phone before going off to sleep.
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, lights emitted by the phone screen strains the eyes, which reduces the motion of the sleep. In conclusion,
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 of sleep can have serious issues on both physical and mental health. In order to control it,one must try to meditate to calm the muscles down.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sleep deprivation
  • immune system
  • cognitive function
  • mental health
  • chronic insomnia
  • accidents
  • productivity
  • stress management
  • sleep hygiene
  • relaxation techniques
  • health care costs
  • economic productivity
  • circadian rhythms
  • sleep disorders
  • meditation
  • yoga
  • stimulant
  • melatonin
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