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Some people think that the best way to broaden young people’s understanding of the world is to encourage them to travel to other countries. do you agree or disagree?

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Travelling abroad for studies and work are increasingly common in recent times.
This
 offers the younger generation to explore new opportunities, which are available in different countries.
This
 essay will discuss, the main advantages why young people will get benefit from
this
 opportunity. On the one hand, travelling to another country can help people to learn a new culture and lifestyle. Younge people can utilise their time by learning social life and practical methods, which may help them to build a better career in their future. People can upgrade their language skill by learning a new language of that country, which may help in better communication with other people and in the general public. Gaining a better knowledge of new things every day will always help to lead a better lifestyle in future.
On the other hand
, by going to abroad, young people can get a better education and study environment opportunities. People can get expert training and practical knowledge on a particular field in which they are interested,
for example
, Information Technology. Travelling outside especially to developed nations helps to understand the advances facilities and how to use them in their future professional life.
This
 opportunity helps young pupils to learn new things every day. While travelling to other countries helps young people to grab and develop new skills and technologies,
also
 they can adopt a new way of living style and social life. I agree, and encourage more and more young people should visit other countries, if any opportunity arrives, for their studies or for work.
Submitted by Ganesh on

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