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Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternatives ways to decrease crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In many parts of the world,
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rime rate is increasing nowadays. Some people believe that offenders should be sentenced in jail for a longer time in order to decline
crime
, while other people think that there are many ways to decrease
crime
 other than a
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prison
sentence
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This
 essay will discuss why a longer
prison
sentence
 has its benefits but why it is not the only way to decline
crime
. There a growing number of people who believe that more strict laws should be
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introduced
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sentence
 offenders in jail. They have reasons to believe that a longer
prison
sentence
 can .
For example
, in some countries, shoplifting stuff under the amount of 50
dollors
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dollars
 will not be charged.
As a result
, these people have reason to believe that a longer
prison
sentence
 is an effective way to decrease
crime
.
In contrast
, there are still some people
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hink that there are alternative ways to decrease
crime
.
For instance
,
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recent research shows that
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rime rate is decreasing after more education relating
crime
 have been conducted.
Therefore
, In conclusion, increasing
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rime rate is still a tough problem in many countries.
This
 essay discussed why a longer
prison
 but why .
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