Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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More and more individuals believe that

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promotes people to spend money on those substances which we actually are not necessary

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our daily lives.

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, other people believe that

advertisting

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advertising

lists out the innovative and useful characteristics of those new products which intend to enhance our quality of lives. In

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essay, personally

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I would agree that

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brings more benefits than drawbacks in our daily lives. There are many disadvantages on the

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towards young people's development in their educational stage, probably the most significant drawbacks

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that the young

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under the developmental stage who often have not enough mature to distinguish whether the message conveying from

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dvertisement is beneficial or not.

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, advertising usually

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essage that

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body shape is perfect which encourage the young to judge people by simply using their outlook appearance rather than their own academic achievement or interpersonal development.

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, young people do not have

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all-round development of their minds to view the world. Despite the aforementioned drawbacks, the most important and beneficial point

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that the aim of

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dvertisement is used to introduce their new products with innovative and advanced technology to the public. Without the promotion of the products by the advertising, the people often have difficult to receive

those updated information

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from the other channels

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as leaflets through

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ailbox or receiving softcopies from individual clients' email

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addresses

. As advertising can transmit a piece of information with

colorful

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picture illustration that the customer can receive the message directly without distortion. Under

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line of thinking, I believe that

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brings more benefits than drawbacks in our daily lives.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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274 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
positive behavior
enrich
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