Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

More and more individuals believe that
advertisement
promotes people to spend money on those substances which we actually are not necessary
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our daily lives.
However
, other people believe that
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advertising
lists out the innovative and useful characteristics of those new products which intend to enhance our quality of lives. In
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I would agree that
advertisement
brings more benefits than drawbacks in our daily lives. There are many disadvantages on the
advertisement
towards young people's development in their educational stage, probably the most significant drawbacks
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that the young
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under the developmental stage who often have not enough mature to distinguish whether the message conveying from
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dvertisement is beneficial or not.
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, advertising usually
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essage that
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body shape is perfect which encourage the young to judge people by simply using their outlook appearance rather than their own academic achievement or interpersonal development.
As a result
, young people do not have
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all-round development of their minds to view the world. Despite the aforementioned drawbacks, the most important and beneficial point
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that the aim of
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dvertisement is used to introduce their new products with innovative and advanced technology to the public. Without the promotion of the products by the advertising, the people often have difficult to receive
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from the other channels
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as leaflets through
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ailbox or receiving softcopies from individual clients' email
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addresses
. As advertising can transmit a piece of information with
colorful
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picture illustration that the customer can receive the message directly without distortion. Under
this
line of thinking, I believe that
advertisement
brings more benefits than drawbacks in our daily lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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