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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals believe that the population of their countries should feed on
food
 which produced in their regions and
also
this
 should be imported as little as possible. I completely disagree that people should be eating
o
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nly local meal because a
food
 variety is the guarantee of the nation’s health.
Secondly
, the
food
 trade contributes to the economic development of the
country
. People’s ration should be varied with vitamins of other
food
of
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 the world. It is known that the human organism depends on
microelements
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 found in multiple foods
such
 as fruits, vegetables, cereal products, and meat. No one
country
 has absolutely all kinds of
food
 containing necessary microelements, so for supplying people with various products countries should exchange or free trade with each other.
For example
, having exotic fruits and meat but not having some cereals, the United Arab Emirates buys missing ones in European countries, so that people are provided with everything they need of
food
.
Moreover
, a
country
 like Germany and China can focus on manufacturing and industrial innovation while import
food
 from other countries. The ultimate outcome is more beneficial for them.
However
,
this
 might not be the case for a
country
 that solely depends on the agriculture sector and the majority of its population are already dependent on it. They can focus on improving its production but
this
 model is not suitable for industrial countries. In conclusion, I personally believe that
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free trade has made countries more economically developed and has supplied people with all
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ypes of
food
 of our world.
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