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Violence in the society is largely promoted by violence shown in media. To what extent do you agree?

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I believe that news agencies possess the power to influence the highly impressionable public-at-large. The common man depends on the channel of their choice for information on world affairs, and there have been various instances wherein violent protests have been sparked and led by the media.
Firstly
, my essay will talk about how the media is used by political parties to
further
 their agenda of toying with public opinion.
Secondly
, we will discuss how all channels are governed by television ratings and dramatize news to make themselves more sellable. We are all aware of the fact that media outlets are puppets in the hands of politicians. The parties all have control over one or the other channels, they mould news to influence society as per their convenience. You will observe that there is a clear demarcation on how a single piece of news is portrayed by different reporters to strengthen the proposition of their supporting units.
This
 confuses the public and they mostly stick to one channel to avoid
this
 situation and
thus
 form a skewed opinion.
For instance
, during elections the public is shown how a political party has suffered at the hands of the opposition, to spark violent rallies and reinforce their support which ultimately will lead to stronger vote banks.
On the other hand
, all television reporting channels are vying to get the best ratings and
thus
 deepen their pockets. Their aim is not to report the truth or best possible angle of the story, but become the leading channel in terms of consumer views and
thus
 sponsor the vested interests of their investors. To achieve
this
 goal the editors have become competitive and violently debate issues. There is a sense of dramatization of information which leads to angering the public and sparking a sense of responsibility. The journalists have many times encouraged people to take to streets and stand up against injustice. During the 'Nirbhaya issue
'
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 it was the media who sponsored the unrest. To conclude, it is these agencies who have pushed people to get violent in many instances.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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