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Some people think that nuclear energy is better than other sources of power for meeting ever-increasing global needs. To what extent do you agree?

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The growth in the world's population and economy and rapid urbanization results in a substantial increase in
energy
 demand. It is believed that nuclear
energy
 would meet the world's consumption;
however
, I would argue that using renewable resources is a better option. On the one hand, there are several reasons why people think that it is better to use nuclear
power
. The
first
 one is that nuclear
power
 could provide stable, while the supply of renewable
energy
such
 as solar
energy
 or wind
power
 depends on weather condition which
are
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sometime
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 unpredictable.
Therefore
, weather changing can detrimental to renewable
power
 generation. Another advantage is that setting up a nuclear
power
 factory
requries
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requires
 a small area, while the amount of space for
s
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olar
energy
 system is much larger.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that alternative
power
such
 as solar
energy
 is a
bettre
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better
 option for society.
Firstly
, radioactive waste eliminated into electricity generation using
nucler
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nuclear
power
 could cause serious damage to the
enviroment
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environment
 and people’s health;
for example
, the accident happened in Fukushima in Japan several decades ago is a typical case.
As a result
, the ecosystem in affected areas
was destroys
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, thousands of people died through the evacuation procedure and after the disaster due to disease caused by radiation exposure.
Secondly
, I believe that renewable
power
 like solar
energy
 or wind
power
 are much safer because they produce zone radioactive materials.Exposure to these materials can lead to
factal
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fatal
facial
factual
 disease
such
 as cancer.
Furthermore
, thanks to technological
advance
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, the supply of renewable resources
has
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 become more stable and the price is more reasonable.
Thus
, I think that in
fututer
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future
nenewable
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renewable
power
 stations could make enough
energy
 to, meet the growing global demands. In conclusion,
although
 using nuclear
energy
 is advantageous in some ways,
i
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 think that we should use renewable
power
 due to the positive impact on protecting
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nvironment
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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