Life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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Stress and all its related illnesses spreading widely
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with the past. One of the main factors for
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life demands and the side effect of the new technology. spending leisure
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doing outdoor physical activities,
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spending more
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with family and friends can help to
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relief
people from a busy week. Its obvious life is getting more demanding, and having only the essentials to live is more expensive than before. people are forced to have
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, it's adding more strain on the individuals.
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both parents need to
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in order to be able to pay for all the bills and their children needs, studies
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spending the one to two hours in the morning preparing children to go to school by its own as if a whole day
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result that parents
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already exhausted, and by the end of the week they are fully draining.
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, the new technology has changed the way of living and working. individuals are spending most of their
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in front of the computer to finish their
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task. not to mention the long working hours that cause people, to reach
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ome end of the day tired, and the easiest thing to do is watching TV or playing
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game in their relaxing
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of doing something more healthy. In conclusion, individuals need to use their leisure
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wisely, by doing some outdoor
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exercises
exercise
and seeing friends and family members and spending
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quality
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, sometimes only talking to a friend can help with releasing so much pressure and worries.
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is important for the life and health of each person.
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