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MANY UNIVERSITY STUDENTS LIVE WITH THEIR FAMILY WHILE OTHERS LIVE AWAY FORM HOME BECAUSE THEIR UNIVERSITY IN A DIFFERENT PLACES. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGE AND DISADVANTAGE OF THE SITUATION.

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While studying in college many students opt to live with their family, whereas there are some who cannot live with them because their universities are in different locations. Benefits of living with parents
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ome cooked meal and saving on living expenses,
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, living away from home can give you an opportunity to learn self-dependence. The main disadvantage living with your parents is not to know the hardship involved in living by your own,
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, when the child moves away from the parents for
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 studies no proper monitoring can be done by them if the child is getting into a wrong company. A student opting for living with their parents and going to universities have to spend less and can enjoy their stay while focusing more on their studies. They do not have to worry about their lifestyle as they have some amount of dependency is there on their parents.
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, students don't have to worry about paying their rents, cooking food, doing laundry, etc. They can just be focused on their studies rather worried about their daily chores. In
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cenario where a student has to live by himself can learn about the hardship of dealing with day-to-day life trouble and can gain insights on how to troubleshoot them. By
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atter part of your life you are not able to adjust with the hardship associated with it. Their individual task abilities can't be carried out efficiently for the main reason that they were not exposed to
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, many students have been found not to know how to even fold and iron their own clothes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cost savings
  • Emotional support
  • Household chores
  • Familiar environment
  • Distractions
  • Self-reliance
  • Independence
  • Exposure
  • Diverse cultures
  • Life skills
  • Social opportunities
  • Financial pressure
  • Homesickness
  • Academic commitments
  • Supervision
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