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Smoking is gaining widespread popularity among the youth. Discuss the reasons for this problem and give workable solutions.

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In the current times, smoking is developing as a bright concept among the youth and spreading like wildlife. Today in the essay, we would discuss both the concerning issue and the viable solution to the mattress,
firstly
 the adoption of smoking occurs due to influence and it often considered as ‘cool’ which is an incorrect notion and
secondly
, the immediate need for appreciation awareness campaign as well as the harmful effects of it is necessary to be communicated.
To begin
 with, the millennials have created a mindset of smoking being an essential prerequisite of adulting which would enable them to be widely accepted by their peers due to
this
 reason smoking is gaining popularity.
For instance
, when students join a new college, they tend to embark upon smoking to make new friends and mingle sufficiently in the college community.
Subsequently
, it is entitled as the highest degree of ‘coolness’ and acceptable among youth. Some students who opt-out of
this
 addition or even practise are generally outcast and treated differently from the majority
such
 people are labelled to be backward. The notion around smoking is a massive facade which engulfs today’s youth.
Although
, it is not considered the end of the world as there are alternatives to fight these burning problems
such
 as embracing strong awareness campaigns throughout the younger generation.
For example
, showing them the harmful effects and long term repercussions which are often displayed in the movie theatre as well as by certain ads.
Moreover
, it is necessary to create a safe environment for them to grow and discard the feeling of being influenced to adopt wrong habits.
However
,to conclude we know every action has its own consequences , I believe enabling a healthy environment with proper education about smoking is essential to curb its current growth among the young people as well as helps them make an informed decision not out of pressure.
Submitted by Purvi Agarwal on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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