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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Lately,
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apid rise in
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ajority of the people and few people
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 that miscarriage should be legalized but some of them are opposing
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 notion. In
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I will be presenting both the views and conclude it
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. At the onset, it is the mother who has
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 sole right of deciding to have a baby or not, because it involves her health. Most of the time,
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 hard decision is taken
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 of physical issues.
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 of which it becomes imperative to have regulations regarding
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, in some of the cities marriages are held at
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ounger age, and it gets difficult for teenage girls to have and handle a baby. To exemplify, girls are not mature enough at the age of eighteen to have a child of her own.
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, if there is proper law for it, we can prevent younger
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 lives.
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, sometimes the physical health issues don’t allow to have a baby and
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 of
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 ladies are forced to have it even if
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 life is in danger and it is too bad to say that in the 21st century we are having
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 orthodox people who are against saving
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 daughters. It is high time to make people educated and teach them to prioritize a healthy life for
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women. To conclude, I totally agree with having a proper constitution for
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 legalization of
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 and providing a healthy society for women.
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