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You recently borrowed something from a friend. Unfortunately, the item has become damaged. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter remind your friend that you borrowed something from him/her explain how the item became damaged suggest how you can resolve the issue of the damaged item

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Dear Manish, I hope you doing well. I was thinking of meeting you, so that those
heels
 that I have borrowed from you, for my cousin's wedding. Unfortunately, before I could
that
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, some happened and those
heels
 got damaged. Actually, after the ceremony, I had kept those
heels
 safely in the box.
Last
 Sunday, my sister visited me.
Moreover
, she had brought along with her cat Peggy. Peggy is only one year old and very naughty. While playing she somehow got hold of those
pair
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footwear
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 and before I could stop her she had already scratched them. The bow stuck on the front side came out and some cracks were visible below. I know those were your favourite footwear and you had already warned me to use them very gently. So, what I did went to the same store and from where you have bought them. There was an exchange offer in which you can get a new pair of shoes by giving them your old or damaged ones. Since there were minor damages caused, they got agreed to accept these.
Further
, they did charge a little bit, now I have a new pair of
heels
 and
this
 time I purchased a cool silver colour, which you have been looking for
from
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 past so many weeks. I
sure
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 you will be very delighted to see your new footwear.
Therefore
, I will be coming
this
 weekend
at
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 your place and we
then
 go out for lunch. I am so excited to see your reaction. Hope to see you soon. Best Regards, Shreya
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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