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Technological development leads to lots of environmental issues. Some people think a simple life style can preserve environment while others argue that technology itself can solve it. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge of experience

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In
this
 contemplate era, Advancement in machinery is somehow affecting surroundings in many ways, whether these are positive or negative. While some people consider that a transformation in lifestyle can save the situation, others opine that automation is a solution in itself. Here I will discuss both the views and my opinion in the essay below.
To begin
 with, Modern
technology
 has brought an immense revision in the lives of people. Now people are living more convenient and efficient life but as every coin has two sides the same as in the case of
technology
 . Due to
technology
, lives of people have been simplified, but by affecting climate, Whether, it is being used at homes or at workplaces but with less use of these gadgets and by doing some work physically can switch the position to some extent.
For example
, now people are using gasoline-powered vehicles while commuting from one place to another irrespective the distance, while
this
 position can be changed just by using bicycles rather than motor vehicles as lesser polluted gas emissions will be there and it will definitely affect the setting in a positive way. So just by a little shift in lifestyle can impact a positive effect.
On the contrary
,
technology
 has answers to all raised questions with the advent of eco-friendly techniques.
However
, the development of eco-friendly
technology
 is in its early stage yet , still many innovations in certain areas brought a revolution in modern
technology
 that can be seen in water purification techniques, renewable energy resources and Solar energy markets.
Therefore
, the waste of the world can be renewed and there will be lesser habitat pollution which is very common in seas or air.
For example
, an initiative by company google and dell has been appreciated a lot as dell is now using mushroom-based packaging while shipment of their products and it reduced the use of plastic. So the
technology
 can be used without any harm to status. In conclusion, there is no doubt that by adapting just a few changes in our lifestyle can bring an immense variation to climate, green
technology
 came with a revolution in the age of
technology
 so by innovation in green
technology
 the situation of polluted environment can be curbed more easily.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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