Computers are being used more and more in education and some say there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ducation
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and in near future most people can use in learning
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because children can not fully understand
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opic without
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eacher. But if when teaching they teach how to self learn there is can be a chance to change online education. Current time there is a lot
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information that youngsters can not memorize and analyze ,that they cannot absorb data without pedagogue.
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, especially students of 1 grade who can not read and write more need
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ain skills that play role in
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eacher
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not explain it , to
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hild will be harder to understand other things .
For example
, because of coronavirus students must learn online , while children of secondary school have a difficulty in online learning and government give access to 1 to grade student learn at school but by saving safety.
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data about all subjects but forgets about
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kill that
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tudent to learn.
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if abilities like
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memorization , critical thinking, creativity mostly teach to 1 to
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students after they can self learn and
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eacher plays
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earn.
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searching and self leaning as the
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student can learn themselves with
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lobal network. In conclusion, today children can not learn without teachers , but if change teaching
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skills like memorization , critical thinking, creativity and beneficially using computer functions , students can learn themselves change to online education and teachers will show
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nly direction.
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