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The exploration and development safe to (?) fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Global warming is one of the biggest threats of destroying the Earth, whereas the largest contributor being Fossil Fuels. I completely agree that finding and developing alternative energy sources and replacing the traditional one should be the main goal of all governments today.
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, using one of the natural renewable sources of energy like Solar Power, Wind Energy can reduce the amount of
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 emission fossil fuels produce to the air. The well-known example is Netherland's Solar Power policies. Even though it has been in use for decades, only after the making it mandatory for businesses the numbers of sold solar panels have (or has?) drastically rocketed. Only if governments take serious strategic laws- we can change something.
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olitics of the biggest world economies'
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erious line of strategies. One of it can be high
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 taxing. Low
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 taxing in the richest countries like the US have shown only the opposite effect. Lack of good public transportation is another reason people buy personal cars or prefer to fly. Only if politics will take a drastic turn to
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decarbonizing
, we can (could or can to use?) reduce the
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 footprint. In conclusion, as the drawbacks of fossil fuels become more prominent, alternative energy sources like Solar Power is likely to gain
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 importance.
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, without the help of our world leaders, nothing can really change. Only by legitimate
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 policies and laws
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we can reverse the irreversible process of global warming.
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