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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed by some that, the buildings designed in large cities should follow the rules of the
government
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, while others argue that, the
design
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 should be finalised by the one who finances the architecture. In my opinion, the person who is financing the building should have a say to the
design
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 of it,
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, the final
design
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 is to be constructed according to the rules. On the one hand,
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overnment must have some building codes in terms of construction which have a great impact on the cities well being.
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, the
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 needs to control the use of the footprint of the plot area, as well as the height of the structure.
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, if all the structures follow the codes, the city will become properly planned.
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, the houses of foreign countries maintain some strict rules by the
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 which enables the cities to be designed in a planned manner.
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, by following
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 regulations, people of the country can ensure safety from many hazardous events.
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 those who spend their money to build their houses should have some freedom to
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, they
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 should be controlled by the codes.
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, people need to build their buildings in accordance with the regulations,
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, no space will remain between two sites and the city will not be a livable place for the dwellers.
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, old Dhaka experienced a tragic fire incident in 2018, consequences of which could have been mitigated if the city was designed as per the structure rules. To conclude,
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 people should be able to
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 their houses as they want, they must do these following the rules regulated by the
government
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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