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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that when
technology
 was simple, our
life
 was better. It is not agreed that advanced
technology
 makes our lives complicated.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss how simple
technology
 was costlier and
secondly
, will discuss how smoother and easier
life
 can be leaded because of having updated
technology
; followed by a reasoned conclusion. A good reason why traditional
technology
 was not a better option is that it did not fully help to reduce the cost of a consumer.
This
 is because there were not so many inventions of items to make our
life
 hassle-free and easy.
As a result
, people had to spend money in order to solve their problems.
For example
, a rice mill, where rice is grinding, was the
first
 invention of the science. But, people had to spend money to grind their rice at the mill. After the invention of grinding and the blender machine, people now do not have to the mill every time that saves their money as well as time. Another pint is that modern
technology
 makes our
life
 convenient, which was not when
technology
 was simple. The reason is that now, we can communicate with people across the world due to having contemporary
technology
. Earlier it was utterly impossible for people to connect with a person, who resided in the other parts of the planet.
This
 illustrated by the fact that landline phones or mobile phones could not make us possible to make a video call, but when
technology
 is updated and the internet, Viber, messenger, etc. have been invented,
then
 our lives became better compared to the past. In conclusion,
this
 essay does not support the idea that our
life
 was better due to having simple
technology
 because it was costlier, and not easy and convenient. y and convenient.
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