Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about which is the most serious environmental issues. While I believe that the extinct of some species is crucial, I think that other issues
such
as environmental pollution, waste, and climate change are
also
very important. The
nature
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environment has already been destroyed seriously. With the development of industries, lots of wildlife’s habitats have gone already because of human’s activities.
As a result
, numbers of species loss their place to live, and disappear in the world at the end.
This
will cause serious effects in many aspects, including
life
circle and food chain.
For example
, bees take a key role in a
life
circle. If bees are disappeared, there will not have any fruits.
Thus
, some animals which
depends
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on the fruits will not have food.
Therefore
, every species plays an essential part of the
life
circle.
On the other hand
, there are various environmental issues are urged to be solved.
Firstly
, air and water pollution already result in people’s health. There are more and more factories around the world. They will release toxic waste-water into river and emission gas
in to
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a
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ir that
have
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already affected all the creatures on the world.
Secondly
, there are too many wastes to handle today. Some animals are miseating garbage as food, so lots of them are killed by
this
reason.
Finally
, climate change is one of the most significant
impact
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. Nowadays, the weather becomes very unstable.
For instance
, some places suffered extremely hot in summer that caused several people died from that. The
life
of every plant and animal
are
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every
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important that we have to try to preserve them.
Nevertheless
, there are many more serious problems
s
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hould be solved at the same time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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