Nowadays a growing number of boys and girls within normal weight ranges have an intense fear of gaining weight and therefore get anorexia. Why do you think a lot of teenagers have a strong desire to be skinny? What can be done to prevent this eating disorder?

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People now are caring about their appearance deeply, especially their weight. They concentrate too much on being thin

thus

causing some psychological problems. I think

that is

because of the trend of the world. Having the right concept of beauty is very important. Social media is the key to the result of tending to be thin. People want to catch everyone’s eyes and follow the latest fashion trend. Stars on the screen are so fit and beautiful.

Besides

, there are lots of clothes are suitable for thinner people.

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ublic will follow the wave and lose weights in an unhealthy way.

For example

, my friend has a standard BMI of 21, but she still wants to lower the number and always complain to me that she is so fat. I know she wants to be the same as her idol.

Therefore

, I believe that the issue is influenced by the entertainment industry. Most important of all, correcting the value is the crucial step. People have to know that beauty is not only about appearance but

also

a health condition. If you did not have a healthy body, you would not have a chance to enjoy it.

Thus

instead

of losing weight, having a balanced diet and regular exercise is many more benefits. It will improve your body, and make you have an optimistic

life style

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As a result

, the government should educate the citizen of the correct information. The entertainment industry

also

has the responsibility to reduce promoting the idea of being thin. Parents

also

have to teach their children the importance of health rather than focus on

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appearance. In conclusion, the main factor to cause people struggling with their weight is

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rend of entertainments. The governments, entertainment industry, and parents all have the responsibility to educate their children on having a balanced diet and work-out for a

healthy

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condition which is the most crucial thing.

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Nowadays a growing number of boys and girls within normal weight ranges have an intense fear of gaining weight and therefore get anorexia. Why do you think a lot of teenagers have a strong desire to be skinny? What can be done to prevent this eating disorder?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

There are some violent cartoon characters on TV, which brings negative influence to children. Do you agree or disagree? What type of TV programmes are suitable for children?

in the future all cars buses and tracks will be driving less the only people traveling inside this vehicles will be passengers do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles out the disadvantages

In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing?

Some people believe that studying History is very important. Others say that it is irrelevant and has many limitations and should not be studied at all. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.