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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. what are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions?

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Criminal activities have increased throughout the decade. The levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.
This
 essay will discuss the causes and solutions to overcome
this
 problem. There are many causes for
this
 problem.
Firstly
, television shows related to criminal activities inspire the majority of youth to commit crimes. Many teenagers are influenced by these shows not realizing the consequences of their action.
For example
,
last
 year a child attempted to drive a car at 200 km/hour which lead to a serious accident.
Secondly
, people are not educated enough about the law. Many people commit crimes without even realizing they are breaking the law.
For instance
, a man had beaten his wife believing that he owned her, but that was just domestic violence which is illegal. There are quite a few possible solutions to overcome
this
 problem. Primarily, I would suggest the entertainment industry to draw less inspiration from criminal stories. They could inspire the young generation by producing meaningful movies and shows.
This
 would send a good message.
Moreover
,
this
 would help the young generation to take better actions and decisions.
Secondly
, children at a lower level of education should be taught what is legal and illegal activities.
Also
, they should learn about the consequences of breaking the law
such
 as punishment of life sentence or jail for 30 years. In conclusions, there has been an increase in youth crimes but we can overcome it by spreading awareness and should be educated and well-informed about all the laws.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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