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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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It is very apparent that the
internet
 has brought revolutionary changes in how
information
 is sent or received and utilized.
This
 has provided not only many opportunities but
also
 created several issues.
This
 essay will explore two of these issues, and will
also
 propose possible measures that can be taken to curtail these problems. With regards to the advancements in sharing due to the invention of the web, the crime of cyber-theft has become rampant.
For example
, whereas in the past new articles used to be filled with reportings of stealing at shops, banks or malls, nowadays most of the crime news is related to the cybercrimes committed by the hackers who persistently searches for
information
 on the
internet
such
 as credit card or bank account data that could help them to do a cyber-theft. To tackle
this
 issue, it must be enforced by the law to have a mandatory installation of a very effective software on every critical system which should obstruct any wrongful flow of
information
 to a hacker. The most obvious other-problem related to the consumption of the
information
 is present in the abundance of fake news or fabricated facts on the
internet
. People read these misleading contents and tend to believe them, and it might result in some of them getting involved in something illegal due to some untrue provocative
information
. To minimize situations like these, regulatory authority must be established which should have the legally provided capacity on the
internet
 to examine the new
information
 and censure those which are inappropriate and do not fill the criteria of veracity. To conclude,
although
 the advancements in sharing and consumption of the
information
 on the
internet
 have created problems of cyber-theft and fake news, they can be mitigated by the legally-enforced use of a very effective anti-hacking software and establishing of a regulatory authority that oversees the new content uploading on the
internet
.
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