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The line graph below gives information about the variation in the percentage of households that owned no car, one car and two or more cars in the UK over a period of 36 years. It is clear that the proportion of families with 2 cars increased dramatically over the period shown while the figure for families without cars dropped considerably. In 1971, the percentages of British homes that owned two cars and three or more cars stood at about 2% and 7% respectively.
By contrast
,around 45% of British families used one car compared to about 48% of families without cars. The
next
 twenty years saw a slight increase in the percentage of households with three or more cars.
However
,the figure for families with no cars remained stable from 1971 to 2007.During the same period, the proportion of families with two cars rose significantly to approximately 26% whereas the figure for those without cars dropped
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