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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped?

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These days, the life of a poor
person
 is quite worse as compared to a decade before. Each country has its own rules and regulations to mitigate poverty. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the plausible reasons for a human's penury and how these people can be assisted.
To begin
, the prime reason for an individual being poor is due to the lack of
education
,
education
 assists a
person
 to get a job or start their own business, which would ultimately elevate their financial situation.
For instance
, Canada's unemployment rate is only between 2% and 3%, due to its superior
education
 system, whereas in Pakistan, the unemployment rate is between 15% to 18% which could be contributed to the inadequacy of proper
education
 system.
In addition
, another reason is the scarcity of opportunities in a country. Very often, changes in the country's policies affect its residents' lifestyle, as these changes can directly affect the possible opportunities they can get. In 2014, Canada announced an immigration program, which resulted in an inflow of many foreign workers, businesses and investments.
This
 ultimately improved Canada's financial conditions.
Although
 there are many ways to help poor people, the important ones are,
firstly
, providing free
education
, countries with free
education
 often prosper better than the countries without free
education
, as learning is a vital part of society.
Secondly
, suitable government policies and regulations to benefit the poor public, these policies often provide breathing space to a poor
person
. These policies might be, reduced to no tax for those earning less than of an average
person
. In summary, the lack of
education
 and earning opportunities are the primary causes for a
person
 being poor. These issues can be reduced by if countries provide free
education
 to the public and amend or implement new policies to assist the poor population.
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