Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person’s decision-making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many companies are spending a colossal amount
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advertising. There are some
people
who believe that it influences
decision making
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while
purchasing, though others feel that it has no
such
effects. In my view,
however
, I think that it affects the choice of individuals significantly.
To begin
with, the advertisements create an interest among
people
to purchase that product or service. It is mainly
due to
the innovative ways of making commercials, which makes individuals relate with them, thereby they end up purchasing it. The famous advert about a health supplement, Complain,
for example
, depicted that children grow taller if they consume it on a regular basis, so many concerned parents bought that drink to increase the height of their offspring.
Thus
, had there not been any commercials which developed
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towards that item or service, there would not have been much demand for them.
Conversely
, many feel that advertisements have no impact on the choice of individuals
while
buying. It is
due to
the fact that
people
have become more concerned about their spending
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, which refrains them from getting carried away by any marketing tactics. In India, the sales of four-wheelers,
for instance
, drastically reduced when the nation
had
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suffered a massive recession, as it created a thought among
people
to limit their expenses.
Therefore
, it is apparent that unless and until there is a requirement,
people
restrict their purchases.
To conclude
, huge money
is
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being
deployed
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on commercials by organisations.
While
there is an opinion among
people
that it alters
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mind-set
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of
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them
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when buying commodities or availing
services
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, others contend that it hardly has an impact. Despite varied views,
according to
me, undoubtedly advertisements have
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impression on thoughts regarding the purchase.
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