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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health
 is a key part of human lives.
Health
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service
 system of the
country
 can play a vital role
for
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 the population of the
country
 and economical growth as well. It is often argued that
h
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ealth
service
 of the
country
 should be run without taking
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money. In my opinion,
h
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ealth
service
 system of the
country
 should have minimal charges rather than 0
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. I will discuss my thoughts in ensuring paragraphs.
First
 of all, I believe that free
service
 means misuse of
the
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health
service
. People can visit doctors very often if they are not in need of doctors consultation,
this
 way people can keep away doctors from their actual duties
such
 as emergencies. Due to the free
health
service
, hospitals are always been busy with the patients and long waiting hours when someone is really in need of
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octor. It will become
time consuming
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 and panicking for serious patients.
For instance
, In
a general hospitals
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a general hospital
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 of
the
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Canada, anytime there will be a minimum waiting time of 4-5 hours due to
cost free
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health
service
.
Thus
, time and slots can be available when there
is
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 some charges for consultation of doctor by visiting hospitals.
Secondly
, as I have seen the countries with
the
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free
health
service
 has many drug addicts rather than countries are charging for services. People even do not care about their selves and involving into
such
 bad habits because they do not have to worry about money if they will be ill. The measure drawback of the free
health
service
 is lack of
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atest technology in
the
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health
 science.
For example
, some countries have lack of ventilators in COVID-19 pandemic situation as they are providing free
health
 services and government funding is not enough to buy more than a limit. To put it in a nutshell, I must say
health
service
 of
the
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any
country
 should not be
an
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expensive but there should be a minimal charge. So, people can understand
u
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se of
service
 and government can afford expensive surgical instruments and
l
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atest medical equipment.
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