Write about the advantages and disadvantages of using laptops.

Laptops are very important for students today. People in the world use the laptops because it
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people. Yet, it has
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advantages and a few disadvantages. I’m going to write about both advantages and disadvantages of laptops. There are some major advantages of laptops. The
first
benefit is that we can use the laptops for education.
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, today all the
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colleges and university use the laptops in the class whereas in the past the education was a book. Another advantage is that we can relationships with family and friends. Yet another benefit is that it can make
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nvironment.
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there are some major advantages of laptops, there are
also
some disadvantages. The
first
drawback is that make some problems for people. Another disadvantage is that some problems for
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aptop they can go to
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ebsite is
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. Yet another drawback is that we sit on the laptop two
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or more. Overall, in my opinion, the advantages outweigh
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isadvantages. I think
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laptops
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very important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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