Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

People have contrasting views,whether the citizens should be entitled to choose their ways of living freely or the ministry should take
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.In my personal view,I believe that people have the right to live their lives based on individual willingness as long as it does not create problems to others as well as
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society as a whole. On the one hand,it is generally accepted that each person should be
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encouraged
to choose their own styles of living according to different goals and interests.
For instance
,some regard success as material abundance,
hence
they may bury themselves in hard work so as to build their wealth and possessions.While others pursue inner peace,they probably opt to live in the countryside to get rid of noise and stress in metropolitan areas.No judgement should be given in these cases which are simply derived from
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arious understanding of life.
On the other hand
,the state authority,like the spine of a country,is obliged to maintain
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social security and guarantee the benefits of the mass people.
Therefore
some necessary rules are definitely needed,
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we can hardly imagine what our society will look like.I had seen the news that a group of adults was arrested because of selling drug samples.
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ealth of other residents and broken legal rules,which should be banned by the nation.Other limitations set by governments in terms of smoking and addictive drugs are
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effective practice. In a nutshell, it is worthwhile that governments take some measures against
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offendence
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when people are allowed to choose individual lifestyles.
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