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Some people prefer the lifestyle and activities offered when living in a cold environment. Others prefer a hot environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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erson has
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pportunity to choose
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ore comfortable place for living. There are some individuals who like fresh and cold
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climate
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, a handful of people enjoy warm weather. I believe that
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 there are some benefits of life on the sea
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 or tropical country,
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in the north part of
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orld there have more
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advantages
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ctive
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. On the one hand, a hot country gives good and positive emotions, because it has
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ig amount of sun and produced vitamin D.
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eople were very positives and joyful,
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, their mood influenced on me and my emotions. In
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ot environment
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you feel
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 and peaceful.
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, sea and beach have some entertainments
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 the whole year.
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, in comparison with hot areas, in the north part of the world
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you have four seasons,
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ifferent kind of
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 activities in each of it,
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, it gives more fun for an active
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, if you like jogging or bicycle you can enjoy more in a fresh spring day, than in hot summer.
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, a
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's brain is more productive in a cold
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climate
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, individuals are mare active. In the conclusion, as we see that all people are different,
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, for some the hot weather is comfortable for living on the
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seacoast
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 and having relaxing lifestyle,
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, others prefer snow and changing
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climate
 with variety of
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 games. In my opinion, in cold areas
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we can enjoy more fresh air with nature and be more active.
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