nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. why do you think this is happening? what can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced

It is generally a heated debate about teenagers, whether all the subjects have to be included in their academic studies. Several people object
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the idea of studying all the subjects;
however
, various others believe it is quite relevant for them to opt for all. In my personal opinion, encouraging to select the subjects in which they are highly interested after high school is comparatively orientational than enforcing everything on them. According to a few studies between different age groups, after high school, teenage students tend to have increased maturity to understand their priorities and obtain clarity towards pursuing their career forward.
Furthermore
, forcing them to study
irrelavant
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fields would potentially decrease their efficiency;
therefore
,
effecting
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their opportunities to achieve results they are determined to.
In addition
, parents burden their kids by imposing stress to go through overall study system, which not only discourages them but
also
hits them on their mental stabilities.
However
, there are many educational institutions who recently began opting a modern method of categorising the fields and help
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upil to choose and shine in it.
Secondly
, it is not necessarily true that all the students should be able to accomplish
similarly
all aspects. Each of them
have
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their
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definite interest and plan to chase them distinctly.
Moreover
, there are various incidents in the history on
man kind
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,
for example
, Albert Einstein, who prove that excellency is not measured in achieving better score but to show their brilliance in their field of interest. Clearly,
this
burden should be removed on every child for the betterment of
the
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society. In conclusion, burdening childhood by imposing
irrelavant
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studies is no help to develop and encourage every teen
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excelling their study of
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. Betterment in education systems would
consequently
, help depromoting the stress caused in the current knowledge world.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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