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Companies spend millions each year on advertising online in magazines and on billboards. These advertisements can encourage people to buy things that they do not need. What are the positive and negative side effects of consumerism?

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Nowadays, companies are spending a vast amount of money behind the advertisement of their product. Adverts are medium to attract specific groups to buy products manufactured by an organization.
However
, due to the influence of
such
 advertisements consumers tend to buy unnecessary products many times, it leads to commercialism. I will discuss the positive and negative effects of consumerism in ensuring paragraphs. One of the advantages of consumerism is social development. In a consumeristic
society
, consumers are able to purchase products effortlessly as rival companies running behind a strain of market economy. Companies launching high-quality products and adverts them by internet, TV commercials, covert advertising, newspaper, magazines, telemarketing and so on, which enable customers to have many alternatives to choose from.
For instance
, the constant broadcasting at products of various companies
such
 as eBay, Mirraw and SheIn on TV and social media helps me to compare the quality and price of products before making an order.
As a result
, in
society
 high in trading, the social status of people significantly improves.
In contrast
, industrialism leads to environmental degradation since people are more likely to throw away the products rather than reuse them. In a consumerist
society
, advertisements not only target audience to purchase products which are unnecessary, but
also
, force them to dispose of products very frequently.
As a result
, the culture of disposing of items alarmingly increasing of non-biodegradable products
such
 as metal, plastic and radioactive materials.
For example
, extremely high waste disposal in western countries grew in significance over the
last
 decades due to their easy availability of products coupled with eye-catching advertisements.
This
 suggests that the more availability of products, the worse the impact on the environment. In conclusion, advertisements help companies boost their sales and attract the customers even though they lead
society
 to select the best products and services. Unfortunately,
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