Some people think that technology is now an invaluable study tool for young people. Others, however, believe that it is harmful for the studying process. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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in automation leads to many changes and provide many benefits to the people in the field of study, job and better quality products. Due to
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that technology is becoming an essential need for students. while others are of the opinion that it affects negatively on students education. I shall discuss both these statements and come to the logical conclusion. To commence with, the advancement in automation provides numerous benefits to individuals. with the availability of tremendous websites and study material which provides countless opportunities to learners to enhance their knowledge and skills by just clicking or searching,
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the internet.
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economical in use.
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lethora of books and reading material in the form of electronic books
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ree or negligible amount of cost.
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, providing the
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comfort and ease while training.
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, the e-learning creates
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ot of disturbance and distraction in the form of advertisements and links while studying.
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eport by the Education department states that students who prepare their concepts through electronic books
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not able to give full concentration which eventually
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their results.
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, increasing knowledge through printed form ensures better understanding, curiosity for study among trainees, and better performance.
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, youngsters able to become mature and serious quickly towards their responsibilities who are not exposed to the machinery. To conclude, despite the
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offered by automation which saves time,money and effort. It's negative influences outweigh
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benefits. Which creates
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ack of focus, in-matureness among individuals.
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