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These days many children spend a lot of time playing video games and many parents feel this is very negative. Do you agree or disagree?

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The virtual gaming industry has grown leaps and bounds in the
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 two decades; the most vulnerable target of
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 profit-making business has been our children. I completely agree with the notion that
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 a trend is harmful to today's younger generation.
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 essay will illustrate how it is impacting their physical and intuitive development.
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, there is no doubt that video games are designed in a way that it attracts and make you feel involved.
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 an attraction is resulting in happiness with being isolated and no interest in social engagements.
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, it is adversely impacting the development of their interpersonal skills.
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, my son enjoys his virtual world more than anything else. He always denies joining us for any family gathering; he feels ecstatic glued to his Ipad (tablet computer) or PlayStation (Sony gaming console) which I see as a major concern for his future.
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, there is another fact which can not be denied is that physical movement is essential for a healthy body; a healthy body is imperative for human being's happiness and well being. Because of these virtual games, pupils are far away from exercise, or any sports activity. To quote an example, a recent study shows that children who are engaged in outdoor games are 30% less prone to catch diseases than the ones have locked themselves in a virtual world.
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 proves that games lacking in athletic activities are affecting pupil’s health in a negative way. In conclusion, to ensure our future generation is healthy and sharp-minded, video games should be banned completely or must be somehow restricted from their reach.
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