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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not trael abroad on holiday. Agree or disagree?

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It is argued that,
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 of travelling abroad,
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ncreasing number of people will prefer to enjoy their vacations in their own
country
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 in the
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 essay agrees with
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 statement because it will save a lot of money and it will save their
time
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 Every person is trying to save their earnings for
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future
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 expenses like
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hild’s education or marriage. As travelling abroad is becoming expensive due to the rise in transportation and living cost around the world,
travelers
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 decide to spend their holidays
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visiting cheap places in their own
country
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.
This
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 will result in huge savings as compared to travelling to
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country
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, and people would be able to
fulfill
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 their
future
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 goals and objectives.
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, a recent survey conducted by the Ministry of Tourism reported that 64% of participants are willing to save their money
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 of spending it on travelling to foreign countries for vacations. It requires a lot of
time
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 to visit another
country
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 because of the longer distance. As men and women are becoming busier due to their work and
family related
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 responsibilities, it is difficult for them to take
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longer
time
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-off away from their busy schedules.
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, they prefer to enjoy their vacations by visiting places within their
country
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 so that there would be enough
time
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 left for them to do other activities.
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,
last
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 year I took 15 days off to visit a foreign
country
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 and to study for a short course but due to the tiredness and exhaustion from the trip, I was not able to complete my short course within my holidays. To conclude,
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arge number of people will decide to take
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time off
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 to explore their own
country
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 in the
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 because it will result in larger savings and they would be able to save their
time
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