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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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Success is the final point after reaching a goal. Nowadays material benefits and wealth had been being
a main criteria
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 for measuring success in life. From my point of view, to be a successful
person
 does not mean has a lot of money. The more effective way is to take a
person
’s relationships and self-confidence. The family is an invaluable thing that people can not buy or sell. In my opinion ,the successful
person
 always has warm relationships with family because support is of paramount importance throughout the journey of life. A family is a group of people who share with a
person
 not only happiness
also
 negative moments. It is helpful to decrease the amount of stress.
For instance
, individual face to face with the decline of the business. The place where he can share a grif is home with family members.
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