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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world? Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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Although
 holidaymakers contribute hugely to the
economy
 of popular destinations, the influx of tourists can cause serious issues.
This
 essay will demonstrate how
tourism
 transforms the
economy
 of poor areas but will
also
 show that
this
 can lead to problems
such
 as the displacement of local
people
. Whilst acknowledging that there are drawbacks, I will argue that the benefits of the
tourism
 industry outweigh its drawbacks. One country that has experienced a significant economic boost from the
tourism
 industry is Thailand. Over the past few decades, many small fishing villages , where
people
 often struggled to make a living, have been developed into thriving holiday destinations. Many local
people
 have spotted new business opportunities and become entrepreneurs, which has
further
 diversified the
economy
. With all the hotels, motels, restaurants, shops and other tourist facilities that have been developed, there are now enough jobs for everyone and the general standard of living has greatly increased. On the other. hand, in Venice, the huge popularity of the canals and stunning architecture with visitors from all around the world has had a negative impact on local residents. The growing need for
tourism
 accommodation, places to eat and shops
has
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 forced too many
people
 to move from their homes to make room for these new developments. But
also
 the situation has resulted in a lot of sense of community in the worst affected areas. In conclusion,
although
 mass
tourism
 can sometimes result in local residents being relocated, it greatly improves the lives of most
people
as well as
 contributes significantly to the nation's
economy
.
Hence
, the positive effects of developing the tourist industry definitely outweigh the negatives.
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Task Achievement
Try to provide more varied examples from different regions or types of tourism to enrich your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider adding a paragraph that explains how tourism management could mitigate the negative effects, to offer a balanced view.
Positive Example
Effectively used Thailand as a specific example to illustrate the economic benefits of tourism, which strengthens your argument.
Structure
Successfully introduced and concluded your essay with clear positions, providing a strong logical flow to your argument.
Task Response
Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of tourism, fulfilling the requirement of presenting a balanced argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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