Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that because of the development and fast expansion of supermarkets, small and local business are unable to compete in some countries and

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situation causes to death of local communities. I completely agree with

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arguement

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argument

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of all, due to supermarkets' prices are cheaper

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the local shops the people naturally choose the supermarkets for shopping so small business groups can not develop. In almost every town there is an example

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situation. While supermarkets' income increases the small shops' gain decreases one and other.

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it influences local communities and causes the death of them.

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losure of local shops makes the dwellers of town move to another city or country because of financial reasons. And

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, the people of local communities lose their

neighboors

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neighbours

, friends and loved ones.

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, if one family close their shops and move to another city somebody in that community starts to think about going somewhere else because there is nothing in the town that connect them to there. In my opinion, throughout years that brings the end of local communities. In conclusion, losing their jobs and loved ones

subsequentialy

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subsequently

lowers the attachment between a person and his/

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community.

Consequently

, it brings the death of local communities.