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Some people think that a person can never understand a culture of the country unless they speak the language. Do you agree with this opinion?

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 era of globalization, people around the world, travel for
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lethora of reasons, may it be for leisure, for business or even permanently for immigration purposes - to live and to retire in a foreign land. It is
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debateable
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 that to get totally intermingled with a
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's culture, it is paramount to learn the local
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 of that
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 and speak in the same
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, without which it might be impossible. Well, I vehemently accord the same notion, and
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 with the local crowd and culture
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 if he or she is ignorant of the local
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. Human
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 social beings and they have a
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 urge and inquisition to understand other cultures and
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 to them. Undoubtedly, the culture of a
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 can only be well understood if you can understand the historical books, magazines and
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newspapers
 that are published in that
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. One should understand the local lingo and discuss it with the local crowd to understand their perspectives of whether they accord it or discord it. The national anthem of that
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, the epic books are all written in their local
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, and many other cultural festivals and ceremonies are always held in
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ocal
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, and unless one understands and interact in
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, they will be devoid of many intricacies and
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eal meaning of these, though they have an option of reading it in their translated native
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I still feel it will
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 its charm and essence, it carries.
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. I never like a dubbed
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 movie, but would always prefer to watch an
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 movie, where dialogues are delivered and understood in
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riginal English
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. Though some can argue that learning and speaking another
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, especially when they have to learn it in later parts of their life,
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 time taking and tedious, Yet the benefits of learning
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oreign
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 are worth the effort. Researches have established the fact that people who are multilingual are far more flexible, have
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ot more
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 inquisitive and intelligent. Natives of one
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 feel amused and
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 up with foreigners easily, just by the idea of commonality of a
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 itself, without which they will be apprehensive and unapproachable. To quote an example, it's easier for
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 people to
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 with
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, because of the close similarity between their languages. It is,
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,
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 with Americans or
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 as each side, unless trained and equipped, have very different languages. To recapitulate, it is proven that
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ocal
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 of a
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 can not be denied if one wants to understand the grassroots of a nation.
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 very beneficial to
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 with the local crowd and understand their sentiments by speaking to them. There is no shortcut to it.
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