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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with statement ?

#governments #money #railways #roads
Growth of a nation depends on various factors but,
rail
line
 and roads provide the biggest contribution to
this
 growth. There, is an ongoing debate about, that nation authority should need to invest more on track
instead
 of the road. In
this
 essay,we will discuss, why it is a wise decision to change
this
 pattern of spending. The
line
 is almost 200 years old and still,it is used to send load over long distances.
However
, we have not seen any major update in
this
 system from almost many decades. All system which
track
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tracks
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 used from communication or other purposes is not updating as fast as they are changing in other means of transport. For, Instance we did not update tracks for high-speed
rail
 to decrease the travel time as compared to highways, where we built many in
this
last
 decades.
Moreover
, as
rail
line
 carry more loads and emits less carbon than other means of road transport, in case of electric trains it's even zero, it makes sense to invest in
this
 for a better future. According to research, for a given load per kilometre
line
 emit one-
third
 carbon than trucks. Going
further
, a majority of passenger wants to travel
with
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by
on
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 the
rail
line
, but due to poor outdated infrastructure,they opted for other means. To put in a nutshell, I would like to say that investing in
rail
line
 is really a good decision by government and in the long term the nation is going to enjoy the benefits of
thisinfrastructure
Correct your spelling
this infrastructure
 like they are still enjoying till now from
last
 century.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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